Tuesday, September 27, 2011
True Confessions: Chap. 6 "Diction"
In Trimble's, chapter 6 "Diction" the advice that felt most familiar would definitely have to be the choosing of the right vigorous verbs. Ever since grade school I've been taught to change up my verb usage and to try to use verbs that are much more creative. I think this advice is also pretty useful to me in respect to my own writing because I think I truly do need to work on using more powerful verbs. My verbs tend to be very one-note in my opinion, and I have a hard time changing it up. I think if I'm much more conscious of this and try to put in more of an effort when it comes to my verb choice, then my writing could improve tremendously. The right verb can definitely make a difference and have more of an impact on the reader, thus vigorous verbs is what I shall work on.
Sunday, September 18, 2011
Heineken Commercial Observation
The Heineken commercial watched in class takes place at what seems to be a house warming party. The lady of the house is showing her friends around and finally brings them to the walk-in closet where they all scream in excitement. Not long after that, their screams become overshadowed by that of a group of men, only this group of men is not screaming about a closet, but in fact a walk-in fridge full of beer.
This Heineken commercial parallels the over-the-top excitement a group of women get when entering a walk-in closet to the of a group of men entering a walk-in fridge full of beer. By having the walk-in fridge be shown to a group of only men, Heineken makes it clear who they're target audience is. The company uses the stereotype of how drinking beer is usually thought to be an act of 'masculinity' to their advantage and thus come up with a very funny and clever commercial for audiences to enjoy... perhaps even while drinking some fine Heineken beer.
This Heineken commercial parallels the over-the-top excitement a group of women get when entering a walk-in closet to the of a group of men entering a walk-in fridge full of beer. By having the walk-in fridge be shown to a group of only men, Heineken makes it clear who they're target audience is. The company uses the stereotype of how drinking beer is usually thought to be an act of 'masculinity' to their advantage and thus come up with a very funny and clever commercial for audiences to enjoy... perhaps even while drinking some fine Heineken beer.
Thursday, September 15, 2011
Commercial to post up:
1. Keep yo hands off my mama.
2. Keep yo hands of my Doritos.
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2 Paragraph write up:
The commercial starts off with a man giving a woman, who seems to be his date for that night, some flowers. She invites him inside and introduces him to her son and walks off to put the flowers away. As she walks away the man checks her out and the little boy doesn't seemed too thrill and even drops his game controller. The man walks up to the little boy and casually sits down, starts up a conversation and picks up a Dorito chip in the process. When the chip is close to his mouth, the little boy slaps him across the face and let's him know to keep his hands of his 'mama' and to keep is hands off his Doritos.
By the little boy saying those two statements back to back, the Doritos company gives us the impression that this little boy cares for his Doritos just as much as he cares for his mama and that both are very precious to him. This scene also makes the audience think that if this little boy is willing to slap a man over some Doritos then those chips must be pretty darn good. This then persuades audiences to go out and try them in order to experience how delicious they are, while at the same time helping to build Doritos' revenue.
2. Keep yo hands of my Doritos.
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2 Paragraph write up:
The commercial starts off with a man giving a woman, who seems to be his date for that night, some flowers. She invites him inside and introduces him to her son and walks off to put the flowers away. As she walks away the man checks her out and the little boy doesn't seemed too thrill and even drops his game controller. The man walks up to the little boy and casually sits down, starts up a conversation and picks up a Dorito chip in the process. When the chip is close to his mouth, the little boy slaps him across the face and let's him know to keep his hands of his 'mama' and to keep is hands off his Doritos.
By the little boy saying those two statements back to back, the Doritos company gives us the impression that this little boy cares for his Doritos just as much as he cares for his mama and that both are very precious to him. This scene also makes the audience think that if this little boy is willing to slap a man over some Doritos then those chips must be pretty darn good. This then persuades audiences to go out and try them in order to experience how delicious they are, while at the same time helping to build Doritos' revenue.
Heineken Walk In Fridge Commercial Questions
1. Why was it all men that was introduced to the walk in fridge full of beer?
2. Where'd they get the money for all that beer?
3. The actress in the beginning seemed to have an accent, where is this commercial originally from?
4. What happens to all that beer?
2. Where'd they get the money for all that beer?
3. The actress in the beginning seemed to have an accent, where is this commercial originally from?
4. What happens to all that beer?
AT&T Commercial Questions
1. How old are these two little kids in the commercial?
2. Why are they in the city?
3. Where are their parents?
4. Why didn't they use the phone from the start to get to where they want to go?
5. Where are they coming from?
6. Why are they dressed that way?
7. Why didn't they use a taxi?
8. Do they have any money?
9. Why was that specific music chosen?
10. Where'd they get the bread crumbs from?
2. Why are they in the city?
3. Where are their parents?
4. Why didn't they use the phone from the start to get to where they want to go?
5. Where are they coming from?
6. Why are they dressed that way?
7. Why didn't they use a taxi?
8. Do they have any money?
9. Why was that specific music chosen?
10. Where'd they get the bread crumbs from?
Monday, September 12, 2011
Are all writers like warriors? (Trimble Chapter 1)
I don't necessarily think that all writes are like warriors. Some writers could just be telling a story, not necessarily defending a claim or anything like that. Writing isn't always about defending your arguments/claims, it could also just be away to expand people's horizons and make them more knowledgeable about whatever it is you're writing about.
AT&T Commercial
In the AT&T commercial watched in class, we see a little boy and girl who show to be out of our time period due to their very classical attire. We can infer that the kids represent Hansel and Gretel, not only due to their clothing, but due to the fact that they are dropping bread crumbs in order to find their way home which happens to be a big resemblance to the Hansel and Gretel fairy tale. In the commercial, those bread crumbs are eaten by pigeons without the kids realizing and thus they are lost in the city.
Now, the whole role of AT&T comes into play. As oppose to truly being lost in the city, the two just whip out their phone and navigate their way back to their "cottage". Seeming to fit in with the whole fairy tale concept, we are shown the 'magic' of technology and the ease of using it; if two little kids not even from our time period can use such technology, then can't anybody? This picture helps create a stigma that AT&T is so easy and useful, and by putting this into the minds of all viewers, AT&T has just created themselves a much wider demographic that includes all generations. Whether you're a lost little kid or an old man who thinks they are too out of tune with this generations technological advances, AT&T is the product for you... or at least this commercial makes you consider that.
Now, the whole role of AT&T comes into play. As oppose to truly being lost in the city, the two just whip out their phone and navigate their way back to their "cottage". Seeming to fit in with the whole fairy tale concept, we are shown the 'magic' of technology and the ease of using it; if two little kids not even from our time period can use such technology, then can't anybody? This picture helps create a stigma that AT&T is so easy and useful, and by putting this into the minds of all viewers, AT&T has just created themselves a much wider demographic that includes all generations. Whether you're a lost little kid or an old man who thinks they are too out of tune with this generations technological advances, AT&T is the product for you... or at least this commercial makes you consider that.
Pantene Commercial (Rough Draft)
In the Pantene commercial, a scenario of a butterfly newly coming out of its cocoon is shown. This to me symbolized a rebirth, fresh start, and new beginning. Though the butterfly has been used a numerous amount of times in a variety of books, shows, commercials, and art works, it still shows to be just as effective.
In the commercial, the butterfly represents the deaf girl. It represents how that girl has really come into her own and has a new found confidence in her violin-playing talent. You can see her really getting into her music while performing on stage, which ultimately ends in a standing ovation.
Friday, September 9, 2011
Freewriting for 7 minutes
So here I am at Hofstra and I am blogging. Writing online makes me feel more comfortable compared to writing on paper. I dont feel as confined and I think my thoughts come out much more naturally and fluent. For some reason once I pick up a pen I'm never able to write down exactly what I'm thinking... Right now I'm actually not suppose to really think about what I'm writing and Im suppose to just let my thoughts flow (according to the rules Professor Lay has given) but I cant help but to stop and think... hardy har har. Rebel. I know... Kinda bored... My times up in like less than a minute so I'll just wrap this up and end with BYEEEEEEE :)
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